Once upon a time their were two girls named kahu and sissy and they were sisters.when every their nana would come home sissy would always hid because she did not want to do work. Kahu would always tell nana that sissy wasn't helping with the work.And when kahu and sissy found a kete they fight over it.When they fight over it the kete the kete ground at them and they yelled and they were scared. Then sissy got something out of the kete and it was a fire thing and then nana came back and when nana came back she told kahu to watch sissy because sissy had something dishrags in her hands. When nana left kahu had to watch sissy but kahu wasn't watching her and when kahu wasn't watching sissy sissy did a bad thing and the bad thing is that sissy made a big fire and then kahu and sissy were yelling then nana came and when she came she was running fast and then she put out the fire.Then when the fire was out nana freeze and then kahu and sissy were talking to nana but nana could not hear them.Then they stared to fight again.Then they were siting down and then WHAM something out of the kete and the name was potiki he was the last finger of Mahuika the fire god. Mahuika had one more fire finger nail ( and that was potiki) because maui he said that he nedid some fire and then when maui got one of the fire finger nails he was not giving the finger nails back and then when their was one more left mahuika got mad at him.When potiki and the two girls were talking saling WHAM!! something or someone hopped out of a brosh and the name was pewkeke he stloe potiki and the two girls were scared. They were on an averd to fine potiki.
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